Thursday, October 7, 2010

We and Us for Friday Flash 55

Step down
on your way
look around
make a stay
power loss
come here
try a toss
sincere
you are
I am
far
gone
to play
a ring
a kiss
an
over nite
gray grey grae
I will step up
for you
on my way
I can pray
you and me
become us and we.


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9 comments:

  1. G-ManOctober 7, 2010 at 9:45 PM

    Jerry...
    I really liked the style of your contribution.
    Excellent 55, and very Romantic!
    I hope you found this to be creative, challenging, and FUN!
    Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End

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  2. Brian MillerOctober 8, 2010 at 3:54 AM

    becoming we and us....that is a very good prize at the bottom of the cereal box...love your early rhyme scheme...some good off beats.

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  3. JerryOctober 8, 2010 at 4:45 AM

    Woke up in the night and thought of a change up for the end of this 55. (Brian)

    G-Man...are you from Michigan originally? KAWE

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  4. TALONOctober 8, 2010 at 6:34 AM

    I like the evolution in this poem. A really neat 55!

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  5. Maude LynnOctober 8, 2010 at 6:46 AM

    Lovely!

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  6. ClaudiaOctober 8, 2010 at 9:25 AM

    ..become us and we..nice one!

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  7. BubbaOctober 8, 2010 at 12:26 PM

    I liked the "gray grey grae" triad and the ending:

    "I can pray
    you and me
    become us and we"

    Nice 55!

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  8. One Prayer GirlOctober 8, 2010 at 1:11 PM

    I think this is my first time here to your blog. Very nice 55. I too love the "you and me become us and we". Beautiful.

    Mine is up.

    PG

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  9. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallOctober 9, 2010 at 7:04 AM

    uplifting and fun 55.
    cool reading!

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