Thursday, October 7, 2010

We and Us for Friday Flash 55

Step down
on your way
look around
make a stay
power loss
come here
try a toss
sincere
you are
I am
far
gone
to play
a ring
a kiss
an
over nite
gray grey grae
I will step up
for you
on my way
I can pray
you and me
become us and we.


9 comments:

  1. Jerry...
    I really liked the style of your contribution.
    Excellent 55, and very Romantic!
    I hope you found this to be creative, challenging, and FUN!
    Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End

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  2. becoming we and us....that is a very good prize at the bottom of the cereal box...love your early rhyme scheme...some good off beats.

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  3. Woke up in the night and thought of a change up for the end of this 55. (Brian)

    G-Man...are you from Michigan originally? KAWE

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  4. I like the evolution in this poem. A really neat 55!

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  5. I liked the "gray grey grae" triad and the ending:

    "I can pray
    you and me
    become us and we"

    Nice 55!

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  6. I think this is my first time here to your blog. Very nice 55. I too love the "you and me become us and we". Beautiful.

    Mine is up.

    PG

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  7. uplifting and fun 55.
    cool reading!

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